February 1, 2013

Closing time: Dialogue via text messages.


I can’t stop crying. It’s so bad. She’s sooo tired.

"I’m sorry, I know it’s no fun."

This’s so much worse than when Ota died. It’s downright cruel.

"Is she talking or anything?"



33 words of dialogue. Prompt via Trifecta.

15 comments:

  1. Very sad, indeed. Well written dialogue.

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  2. The dialogue really brings out the emotion.. So sad.

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  3. Closing Time. Have you read the book by that same name by the author of Catch-22?

    Never easy, but you did a good job of capturing it in 33 words.

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  4. as hubbymoose and I get older we see more and more family and friends leaving us before WE re ready. Very well done.

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  5. Very emotional conversation. Nice writing.

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  6. Very moving. Sad but, good at the same time. Very well done.

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  7. Death hurts & how.An emotional piece,very well written.

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  8. )': So much feeling in so few lines.

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  9. My heart snaps for these people.

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  10. There is a sadness that can never be touched; a well deep and unfathomable. You shed light on that darkness with this.

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  11. Ouch. That's hard to read. Nice job.

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  12. So sad and so well captured. Well done.

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  13. Oh my. Not light reading here... that's some real dialogue.

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