March 15, 2013

desperation


 
 
She’s got to be here somewhere.

“Mama? Mama?!!”

Who are all these people? Where’s my mommy?! What happened? Where am I? Oooh there she is… I thought. Oh where is my mommy?
 
"Mommy?!!"
 
 
 
 
hooking up with Trifecta again.
 
 
 

14 comments:

  1. A lost kid is always the worst ): I could feel the desperation and fear. Awesome piece!

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  2. Oh,the panic & helplessness of a small child lost!How well you have expressed all this in just 33 words!Excellent job:-)

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  3. I'm sure Mommy is in a panic as well. I hope nothing terrible has happened.
    Katie atBankerchick Scratchings

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  4. I would hate to be lost in that fog. Interesting piece.

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  5. Poor baby! It's terrible to be lost.

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  6. Scary scenario. Give me chills just thinking about it. Well done!

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  7. I totally heard this in that little one's voice. Well done!

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  8. You have the voice down. Always makes me on edge. I've been the lost one AND lost one. Not fun either way!

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  9. A nightmare in 33 words. This is a great piece - I agree, you nailed the voice. Awesome!

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  10. Great use of character point of view.

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  11. Definitely some of my less pleasant childhood memories... And probably not the happiest for Mum, either! Well done.

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  12. I hate to see a lost kid. Although my brother was quite the hider: At mall's he would jump up with the mannequins, adopt a pose, and stand there frozen while my mother went into a panic.

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